The Wagtunes Corner
- KVRian
- 943 posts since 11 Dec, 2014 from one rocky mountain to another
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UltimateOutsider UltimateOutsider https://www.kvraudio.com/forum/memberlist.php?mode=viewprofile&u=216800
- KVRian
- 810 posts since 5 Oct, 2009 from Portland, OR
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- KVRist
- 168 posts since 18 Oct, 2017
Whoa you are getting good, Steve!
It would be great if the song is in C# (because that would mean my guitar didn't tune down).
That said, I think it could be even better! You could use the strings at 0:39 as an intro. Also by ending the song somewhat more dramatically. To avoid the plain cadence and stay in the mood of the song ("at all..." A). And obviously a cadence should sound like a clock
So I put 5 chords in it: C# A E+ D7 C#
g#c#e# eac# eg#c dac c#g#c#
Less C#
Clock A
On E+
The D7
Wall C#
It would be great if the song is in C# (because that would mean my guitar didn't tune down).
That said, I think it could be even better! You could use the strings at 0:39 as an intro. Also by ending the song somewhat more dramatically. To avoid the plain cadence and stay in the mood of the song ("at all..." A). And obviously a cadence should sound like a clock
So I put 5 chords in it: C# A E+ D7 C#
g#c#e# eac# eg#c dac c#g#c#
Less C#
Clock A
On E+
The D7
Wall C#
- KVRAF
- Topic Starter
- 21191 posts since 8 Oct, 2014
This one is from my CD "Amp It Up" with Cyber Diva doing lead and Daina and Ruby on background vocals. This was my attempt at a take off of the group "The Wednesdays." The song is called "Til Tuesday Comes". Thank you all for the comments so far. No Layzer, this thread won't be locked.
Till Tuesday Comes
I see the signs
They've been there for so long
It's such a crime
That all the love is gone
Who would have known
That it would end this way
Down to the bone
The pain won't go away
So I'm gonna go and cry for now
For days on end
And I'm gonna get through this somehow
Cause time's my friend
And if Tuesday is your final day
Then I will wait for the sun
Till Tuesday comes
My friends were right
They've been right all along
I fought the fight
But all the love is gone
Who would have known
That it would end this way
Down to the bone
The pain won't go away
Repeat Chorus
So pack your bags
And leave my sight
Leave me to cry
Into the night
Repeat Chorus
https://soundcloud.com/steven-wagenheim ... /amp-it-up
Till Tuesday Comes
I see the signs
They've been there for so long
It's such a crime
That all the love is gone
Who would have known
That it would end this way
Down to the bone
The pain won't go away
So I'm gonna go and cry for now
For days on end
And I'm gonna get through this somehow
Cause time's my friend
And if Tuesday is your final day
Then I will wait for the sun
Till Tuesday comes
My friends were right
They've been right all along
I fought the fight
But all the love is gone
Who would have known
That it would end this way
Down to the bone
The pain won't go away
Repeat Chorus
So pack your bags
And leave my sight
Leave me to cry
Into the night
Repeat Chorus
https://soundcloud.com/steven-wagenheim ... /amp-it-up
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- KVRAF
- 2350 posts since 28 Mar, 2007
Are the lyrics and melody your own work ?wagtunes wrote:
The Clock On The Wall
Two A M right now
As I'm staring into space
Can't escape my dreams
Better nightmares in their place
But all the dreams I have
Just don't matter much at all
When all I have is the clock on the wall
No one seems to care
For the dreamers in this world
Life it just goes on
There's no place for wishful girls
And all the dreams I have
Just don't matter much at all
When all I have is the clock on the wall
If only my dreams could meet reality
Oh what a wonderful place this world would be
But I'll sleep tonight
And wake up tomorrow morn
In between the dreams
Welcome death after they're born
Cause all the dreams I have
Just don't matter much at all
Even less than the clock on the wall
Repeat Bridge
Repeat Last Verse
https://soundcloud.com/steven-wagenheim ... lead-vocal
Or are they someone else's copyright ?
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thecontrolcentre thecontrolcentre https://www.kvraudio.com/forum/memberlist.php?mode=viewprofile&u=76240
- KVRAF
- 35098 posts since 27 Jul, 2005 from the wilds of wanny
wagtunes wrote: I decided to make my first post a song that I just completed yesterday. I think it's one of the nicer songs I've written.
dellboy wrote:
Are the lyrics and melody your own work ?
Or are they someone else's copyright ?
- KVRAF
- Topic Starter
- 21191 posts since 8 Oct, 2014
Took some suggestions in completing this track. Last chorus is orchestrated with 1st and 2nd violins, violas, celli and French Horns.
Bring On The Klingon
What makes you think I'm totally square
Musical choice a total long hair
Movies and books from great days of old
Why you think that I'm so cold
Dinner for two at ma and pa's grill
Bottle of wine you think of as swill
Hair in a bun and uptight as hell
I got something here to tell
Bring on the Klingon
Video games
High tech's a train wreck
They're all the same
You'll someday see and
Remember my name
Bring on the Klingon boy
I can play your game
I may appear to be quite reserved
Don't you believe all that you've heard
I'm quite a catch for just the right guy
So just look me in the eye
Repeat Chorus
Star Trek Star Wars
Matters not to me
I can become
Whatever you need
Repeat Chorus
https://soundcloud.com/steven-wagenheim ... -on-backup
Bring On The Klingon
What makes you think I'm totally square
Musical choice a total long hair
Movies and books from great days of old
Why you think that I'm so cold
Dinner for two at ma and pa's grill
Bottle of wine you think of as swill
Hair in a bun and uptight as hell
I got something here to tell
Bring on the Klingon
Video games
High tech's a train wreck
They're all the same
You'll someday see and
Remember my name
Bring on the Klingon boy
I can play your game
I may appear to be quite reserved
Don't you believe all that you've heard
I'm quite a catch for just the right guy
So just look me in the eye
Repeat Chorus
Star Trek Star Wars
Matters not to me
I can become
Whatever you need
Repeat Chorus
https://soundcloud.com/steven-wagenheim ... -on-backup
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Distorted Horizon Distorted Horizon https://www.kvraudio.com/forum/memberlist.php?mode=viewprofile&u=392076
- Banned
- 3882 posts since 17 Jan, 2017 from Planet of cats
You're completing a one song a day?
Damn.. Wish I had your drive to finish songs
Damn.. Wish I had your drive to finish songs
- KVRian
- 1268 posts since 12 Aug, 2004
As you seem to be well versed in composition, orchestration,sound design and mixing and mastering. I would be interested in your critique of my attempts at songwriting and music production. Here is my latest which comes with a disclaimer that it is a cover. If you would rather hear one of my originals my post includes a link to my posts on SoundCloud. Your honest opinion would be welcomed positive or negative.
https://soundcloud.com/karma_tba/blue-light
https://soundcloud.com/karma_tba
I follow your lead in asking the opinion of other's on KVR. You respect their opinion as I do yours.
https://soundcloud.com/karma_tba/blue-light
https://soundcloud.com/karma_tba
I follow your lead in asking the opinion of other's on KVR. You respect their opinion as I do yours.
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jacqueslacouth jacqueslacouth https://www.kvraudio.com/forum/memberlist.php?mode=viewprofile&u=48379
- KVRian
- 1149 posts since 18 Nov, 2004
I think he has you all fooled. I suspect this is in fact Wags' real singing voice.
- KVRAF
- Topic Starter
- 21191 posts since 8 Oct, 2014
Honestly, I'm probably the last person here who should be giving his opinion about music. The general consensus of this forum is that I have as much talent as a banana peel and maybe not that much.Karma_tba wrote:As you seem to be well versed in composition, orchestration,sound design and mixing and mastering. I would be interested in your critique of my attempts at songwriting and music production. Here is my latest which comes with a disclaimer that it is a cover. If you would rather hear one of my originals my post includes a link to my posts on SoundCloud. Your honest opinion would be welcomed positive or negative.
https://soundcloud.com/karma_tba/blue-light
https://soundcloud.com/karma_tba
I follow your lead in asking the opinion of other's on KVR. You respect their opinion as I do yours.
I will listen to some of the music on your channel first chance I get and PM my impressions privately. Please take any comments I make with a grain of salt. I really mean that. I'm no authority on anything.
- KVRian
- 1268 posts since 12 Aug, 2004
I am thick skinned so don't hold back...if it sucks it sucks. From my view point my oldest and newest are my best efforts. There's a lot of filler in between. I can handle the truth.wagtunes wrote:Honestly, I'm probably the last person here who should be giving his opinion about music. The general consensus of this forum is that I have as much talent as a banana peel and maybe not that much.Karma_tba wrote:As you seem to be well versed in composition, orchestration,sound design and mixing and mastering. I would be interested in your critique of my attempts at songwriting and music production. Here is my latest which comes with a disclaimer that it is a cover. If you would rather hear one of my originals my post includes a link to my posts on SoundCloud. Your honest opinion would be welcomed positive or negative.
https://soundcloud.com/karma_tba/blue-light
https://soundcloud.com/karma_tba
I follow your lead in asking the opinion of other's on KVR. You respect their opinion as I do yours.
I will listen to some of the music on your channel first chance I get and PM my impressions privately. Please take any comments I make with a grain of salt. I really mean that. I'm no authority on anything.
- KVRAF
- 40137 posts since 11 Aug, 2008 from clown world
jacqueslacouth wrote:I think he has you all fooled. I suspect this is in fact Wags' real singing voice.
Anyone who can make you believe absurdities can make you commit atrocities.
- KVRAF
- 7691 posts since 11 Jun, 2006
Bring On The Klingon
i can hear this as a schoolhouse rock tune back in the 70s
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WWZpLS1I6uM
i can hear this as a schoolhouse rock tune back in the 70s
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WWZpLS1I6uM
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- KVRAF
- Topic Starter
- 21191 posts since 8 Oct, 2014
Today's offering is from my CD "Six Guns And A Chaser"
Destiny Rides Again
I was feeling quite low
Lost with no place to go
But I knew in my heart
He wouldn't be far
And he'd let me know
Sure enough then he came
In the cold freezing rain
Like a knight on his steed
To set my soul free
There's only one name
Destiny rides again again
Destiny is my friend my friend
He is always with me
He's as true as can be
With me right to the end he rides again
When my path isn't clear
I can feel that he's near
Leading me through the night
To find what is right
And live without fear
When the future's in doubt
I just give him a shout
Clearing obstacles far
No matter how hard
I'm never without
Repeat Chorus
And while he's never the same
I'll remember his name
Repeat Chorus
https://soundcloud.com/steven-wagenheim ... d-a-chaser
Destiny Rides Again
I was feeling quite low
Lost with no place to go
But I knew in my heart
He wouldn't be far
And he'd let me know
Sure enough then he came
In the cold freezing rain
Like a knight on his steed
To set my soul free
There's only one name
Destiny rides again again
Destiny is my friend my friend
He is always with me
He's as true as can be
With me right to the end he rides again
When my path isn't clear
I can feel that he's near
Leading me through the night
To find what is right
And live without fear
When the future's in doubt
I just give him a shout
Clearing obstacles far
No matter how hard
I'm never without
Repeat Chorus
And while he's never the same
I'll remember his name
Repeat Chorus
https://soundcloud.com/steven-wagenheim ... d-a-chaser