[rock] Afghanistan

[enroe]

Now, Afghanistan has been a topic in the news since
almost 15 years. And there has been warfare and
repression since more than 30 years.

"Afghanistan" is my latest song. The song is about an
afghanish girl who left her former native land and settled
in a western country. She still remembers some fragments
of the ancient time when she grew up in Afghanistan.
You can listen it here with a picture-slide-show:

http://andy-enroe.bplaced.net/22_songs/ ... nistan.htm

Direct link:

http://andy-enroe.bplaced.net/22_songs/ ... nistan.mp3

Any feedback, complaints + suggestions are welcome!

andy enroe.

[layzer]

very good, Sir! this has special meaning for me as i have a niece that lost her husband in Afghanistan.
it got a 2nd and 3rd play from me. great song!

[pzi]

very nicely executed, clean mix. well done!
Every part is quite well following and fits in place. I could imagine an electric guitar solo in the vein of the chorus melody at some point, but it works very nicely as it is now.

[Frantz]

I especially like the original subject matter of your songs. I enjoyed the middle eight section (starting at 2:30) of this one the most. "And she still sees her sister’s eyes" is a great line.

I thought there was room for improvement in the mix. Heavy mid-range frequencies. Excessive slap back echo or room reverb on the percussion. Too much compression sucking the life out of the acoustic instruments.

[enroe]

very good, Sir! this has special meaning for me as i have a niece that lost her husband in Afghanistan.
it got a 2nd and 3rd play from me. great song!

Thank you layzer!

I'm glad to hear it means somehting special to you - but sad to hear
about the loss of your niece's husband!

For me it's the story of a girl in the circle of acquaintances which
deeply moved me. And this was worth to become a song.

[enroe]

very nicely executed, clean mix. well done!
Every part is quite well following and fits in place. I could imagine an electric guitar solo in the vein of the chorus melody at some point, but it works very nicely as it is now.

Thanks pzi!

And yeah, a guitar solo is missing!

[enroe]

I especially like the original subject matter of your songs. I enjoyed the middle eight section (starting at 2:30) of this one the most. "And she still sees her sister’s eyes" is a great line.

I thought there was room for improvement in the mix. Heavy mid-range frequencies. Excessive slap back echo or room reverb on the percussion. Too much compression sucking the life out of the acoustic instruments.

Thank you Frantz!

I see you listened quite fine to my song. The middle eight section -
I call it the break-part - is indeed felicitous.

And yes, you're right, the compression sails near the wind - not good
for the acoustic guitar at the beginning and at the end. I
appreciate your opinion very much and think about it. Maybe some
percussion can improve it ... for the next mix-version I'll work on
these issues!

[layzer]

I thought there was room for improvement in the mix. Heavy mid-range frequencies.

i thought the same, but i did't want to sound like a broken record bitching about lacking bass.
so i just commented on the musicality of it
hey Enroe, how would you like to hear this mastered in LAYZERSOUND® ?? see what Frantz and others think.
let me know and i will post a soundcloud of my mastered version i'm listening to

[enroe]

I thought there was room for improvement in the mix. Heavy mid-range frequencies.

i thought the same, but i did't want to sound like a broken record bitching about lacking bass.

I'm always eager to hear your thoughts, even if it's always "too weak
bass", haha. But of course I'll check and test these thoughts on my
systems in order to see if I can reproduce them. So it's most interesting
and exciting!

In the case of "afghanistan" I wanted this song to sound good on
mini-speakers, TV-sets or cars. So I stressed the mids very much. I must
admit: I still haven't found out how to master so that a song sounds
good on mini-speakers AND on a good hifi-system. That seems to me
the "quadrature of the circle" - but if you have any advices ...

so i just commented on the musicality of it
hey Enroe, how would you like to hear this mastered in LAYZERSOUND® ?? see what Frantz and others think.
let me know and i will post a soundcloud of my mastered version i'm listening to

Yes, thanx, PM sent!

[enroe]

I've uploaded a new version of "afghanistan".

Changes: Less aggressive compression --> the sound
doesn't jump "into your face" any more. Instead the
musicians stay in front of you - in a decent distance -
on the stage.

In my taste the new version sounds better, but needs
higher volume.